View Full Version : My bands new song

10-27-2004, 08:52 PM
It's not complete, but I'll just go ahead and post to see what you guys think so far. stressed words are in caps, words in parentheses are between lines.

Who are they to tell you how
Your life should be inside and out
Always quick to criticize
When all their rules aren't realized

What more must they do to you
before you finally see the truth
Countless years of their abuse
The time is now for you to choose

(Because there are)
TIMES I know when you have found
that FEAR alone holds you a-bound
FEAR of leaving this settled place
FEAR of seeing your old life erased
(And there are)
TIMES in life when letting go
Of WHAT, before, you called your home
Is necessary, of course, unless
You never wish to see the rest
(Of the life ahead)

That's about it two verses and a chorus, but I think it has a lot of potential.

10-28-2004, 05:01 PM
Wtf? That's it, I'm changing my screen name, It doesn't get me any respect in this forum. I was trying to break a few stereotypes, but I suppose my lyrics need to be read if I want to accomplish any thing, oh well.


10-28-2004, 06:20 PM
I like it man.
And its pretty aewsome,
hows your band doing anyway?
I really like it,
got some deep meanings
so keep on kickin

Blue Light Special
10-28-2004, 06:30 PM
Seems too short for the topic. The Flow in the verses also seems out of whack. It does not fit well. Your reptition of words could be more creative too.

10-28-2004, 06:49 PM
Oops, I meant to say that's about it so far, there's plenty more to come. Thanks for the crits anyway. Bands doin awesome by the way, we just got an Mbox and Condenser Mic so we're going to start pumpin out cd's pretty soon. Thanks