View Full Version : New Song

10-27-2004, 02:56 AM
I'm not yet finished with it but could someone here give me some feedback on what I have thus far?

If goodbye is so right, why am I broken inside?
Torn hearts never mend, we pretend it again and again
This is all wrong, to move on to an empty best
I still remember December as if it never left

And i'll leave the lights on
Hoping you'll come home tonight
And i'll wait with the phone by my side
Hoping you'll call me tonight

You layed in my arms like the lights were down low
Like we're all alone, like we're in our own little world
I never seen it, I never seen you leaving me

Feedback please :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave: :wave:

Slyk Hat
10-27-2004, 08:42 AM
If you all could get better recording, and a little more experience, ya'll would probably make it big....the song is decent, put a chorus and a little more. It depends mainly on the instrumentals if the song turns out good but the lyrics are nice...

10-27-2004, 12:16 PM
How do you know of our recordings and experience?
Oh, if you heard a song, those (purevolume) aren't the studio versions.
The studio is where we are headed for our new album but much thanks.

Anyone else got feedback for me?