View Full Version : Christrotted (PLZ CRIT!!)

10-23-2004, 12:06 AM
OK, after many a year (a few days maybe), I have come up with a song for the title I thought of Christrotted. I came up with the name because I wanted to write a song about organized religion. I don't think its finished yet, so please crit it. Don't be nice either. Give it to me hard!

Illusions of mind and matter alone,
Social Deformities and bitter clones.
The tainted womb of existence dies,
Caught up in a needle web of lies.

Inbred malformations of the isotope,
Salvation for those who will pay for hope.
Death of the future, birth of the end,
Among the fallen you pay to transcend.

Stray to the path of the ****ed,
Return to the Black Age,
Regress to a time,
Once forgotten.
The time of the Fallen,

Spritual amenities descend the sky,
The archetype of Truth governs the lie.
Merging of faiths to a monstrosity of hate,
Merging of lives for death to create.

A spilling of hate from Heaven's Tear,
Brought to us by the Angel of Despair.
The Wrath of God, or so they say,
Age-old exuses for night and day.

Return the child of faith,
Stay on the path of the ****ed,
Regress to an age,
Once forgotten,
The Time of the Fallen,

Atrocities of life and the sacred human mind,
Death to the heretics and all of their kind.
Exterminate the masses before they finally know,
Theories and truths disproved years ago.

Blind the numbed mass public eye,
Before they grow and begin to wonder why:
Where is our God? Why is he not here?
Uneducate the children, lie to kill their fear.

The path of the ****ed dies,
The age of Reason falls,
The death of logic,
Now forgotten.
A new Reign of Terror,

10-23-2004, 12:05 PM
No one?

10-23-2004, 12:21 PM
umm... what's it about?

10-23-2004, 01:18 PM
i dont have a clue either,but i could imagine humin that in me head:)
pos crit:sorry but i aint sure about the christrotted bit,it might jus be me but i think that might make ur song sound a bit plain
but good song anyway m8:)

10-23-2004, 01:36 PM
my eyes hurt.

10-23-2004, 02:30 PM
umm... what's it about?

Umm... maybe if you read the little bit at the top that says its about ORGANIZED RELIGION, it might make more sense to you. ;)