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Society Sellout
10-21-2004, 06:04 PM
Ok here are two songs I wrote that I would like some feedback on.

Romantic Gadget

Verse:
Please donít toy with this
perfect picture of romantic lullabies
Carelessly pushing me aside when another
false importance itís just a lie
I try to keep up with all the things you do
Every day now, just focusing on you
And never knowing just what you're gonna do
It just keeps hurting and twisting and making a deeper wound

Chorus:
Because itís killing me trying to play these
guessing games with you and not really
ever knowing what is the truth.
Hoping to grasp something thatís not there
And choking cause Iím breathing this thin air
This twister of hide and seek has taken me
over my emotional peak.

Verse:
As we speak weíre moving forward
while screaming in retreat
Unspoken promises and hallow words
left me feeling somewhat incomplete
Another day with you is slowly passing by
I keep on trying to keep us from falling to the sky

Chorus:
Because itís killing me trying to play these
guessing games with you and not really
ever knowing what is the truth.
Hoping to grasp something thatís not there
And choking cause Iím breathing this thin air
This twister of hide and seek has taken me
over my emotional peak.

Bridge:
I ask you, you ask me
The pressure of this time
is taking it's toll on me
I ask you, you ask me
The pressure of this time
is taking it's toll on me
I ask you, you ask me
How can I trust you when
you're not apart of me?

SubtleDagger
10-21-2004, 06:15 PM
One song a day. Read the rules.

Society Sellout
10-21-2004, 06:20 PM
my bad srry newbie here