rate this song on a 1-10 scale, u cant use 0(for my sake)

[KISSguy]

im been searching for years
and i found myself
been hidden under a paper cut
all my life
ive been wondering for years
and i found the answer
been passed from tree to tree
all my life
ive been running for years
and now i realize
theres been nobody racing me
all my life
ive been drivng for years
and i have been lost
been driving in circles
all my life

where were you
when i was in trouble
all these years
ive been in a black hole
dont know where im going
im just a fly on the wall
i have no direction
but my search is over now

ive been yelling for years
now i hear the echo
been stuck in a valley
all my life
ive been learning for years
and now i know the answers
been a grain of sand
all my life
ive been struggling for years
and now i broke free
been in a straight jacket
all my life
ive been searching for years
and i found myself
been hiding in a paper cut
all my life

where were you
when i was in trouble
all these years
ive been in a black hole
dont know where im going
im just a fly on the wall
i have no direction
but my search is over now
yeah my search is over now




also what would be a good name for it?

[cashay350]

All My Life,.... thats what Id call it. I can see this as a Dylan, Seger kind of song with jsut an acoustic. Id say 7 or 8, I liekd the verses but not the black hole part. Dont know y

[Blue Light Special]

Verses good, the chorus could use some work. Nice structure. Nice flow. Good word usage and imagery. You have a good song going for you.

I like the "All my life" suggestion for a song.

I personally heard a rolling stones song in my head. But dylan, seger was also a good suggestion.

[KISSguy]

this is an old post, but i had to look it up bcause i lost my lirics i originally wrote down, and i noticed somebody didnt like the black hole part. what that part meant is all these years, ive been lost and alone, and not able to escape, like getting sucked into a black hole, i coulda used quicksand, but black hole flows smoother adn rhymes.

[Skizzzo]

K, first off do not listen to Blue Light because apparently he cannot recognize good literature when he reads it.

Your Chorus is good
Your Verses suck hard core.... Period

I'm currently taking a philosophy class in which I have to decipher writings of Aristotle which prove easier than reading this garbage. This doesn't make sense, grammaticly and structuraly. Just read what you wrote. I'm not even going to take the time to edit this, Re-submit a non****ty version please.


This is a rough rough rough rough rough rough rough rough rough draft.