"His voice it terrific, but he is used a little bit too much on CG and it gets really old really quickly. Breakdowns, there is no two ways about it. Every post hardcore/metalcore/hardcore album will have them."
Maybe reword it to something along these lines:
His vocal work is terrific, but is over-utilized on Chasing Ghosts and become repetitive much too quickly. While breakdowns find their way on many releases of this ilk, there are many more on this album, dragging down the creativity and making Youngbloods seem more mature in terms of songwriting.
"The one good breakdown on this album is the one on the track “Geoff Sux 666.”
Maybe re-word this sentence to make it flow with the paragraph it is a part of just a bit better.
"Geoff Sux 666" provides the only breakdown that strikes the listener as original.
Just some things that I saw, good review though. I pos'd.